tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post7847565628842424181..comments2024-03-28T15:21:44.806-04:00Comments on Susan's Poetry: Coming HomeSusanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-82961840690527514592015-02-18T01:45:26.188-05:002015-02-18T01:45:26.188-05:00Like Sherry, I too am here as an alternative to th...Like Sherry, I too am here as an alternative to the bleak pictures of the future - and this is quite a contrast - benign, noble, wish it could be true, or at least parts of it!Marina Sofiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15251903359649828285noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-65831623292157405742015-02-17T19:53:52.141-05:002015-02-17T19:53:52.141-05:00I am back for relief after our poems of an alterna...I am back for relief after our poems of an alternate future and all I can say is my soul basks in the relief and beauty of your vision......thank you!!!!! May it be so! I love us as saplings, holding onto the earth.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-2016600241184696562014-08-15T21:57:29.135-04:002014-08-15T21:57:29.135-04:00Like the poem; couldn't tell ( from mark-up an...Like the poem; couldn't tell ( from mark-up and/or lack of - I was confused) how to read it. But it reads itself just fine in my accent, lol. <br /><br />Gay's comment clued me in better ... maybe. Now I can read it at full gallop, powering on to the end. But I still "hear" some light and shade underneath that: the horses' feet hitting the ground and lifting up again.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-33125399223346985852014-08-15T18:45:13.091-04:002014-08-15T18:45:13.091-04:00The is fantastic. I especially enjoy the invitatio...The is fantastic. I especially enjoy the invitational "Let me tell you..." that leaves the reader thirsty. As well as the line "Let me tell you about the homecoming queens, always the newest and the oldest members of society." How frank and truthful that line is. Much applause. Benjamin Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03591119579776940792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-74524997208724473562014-08-15T12:03:31.503-04:002014-08-15T12:03:31.503-04:00Explicating this should start from the bottom up -...Explicating this should start from the bottom up - the word choices make this intense with so many stressed words enjambed - intended that we should stop, pay attention, nothing fluid...I appreciate your marking the caesuras - lots of spondees to stress the importance of the words. I agree with the statements above about the poem in its meaning, the ideas regarding peace, the telescoping of a kind of utopia where strife is a memory. This is an important poem, Susan. Conveying it with proper diction and proper rhythms make it all the more effective.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-61996219148119180682014-08-15T11:54:30.829-04:002014-08-15T11:54:30.829-04:00oh that sounds like a wonderful place...equality.....oh that sounds like a wonderful place...equality..and no one wins except all do... the generations peacefully together, learning from each other... what a homecoming indeedClaudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-18751363655874037722014-08-15T10:37:55.629-04:002014-08-15T10:37:55.629-04:00I love this. The more we envision peace, the more...I love this. The more we envision peace, the more it's reality could set in. I hope. <br />You're a talented visionary. So nice.Myrna R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15088915165678737118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-10744635049325345402014-08-15T09:06:07.597-04:002014-08-15T09:06:07.597-04:00"since no one wins unless all win"...wha..."since no one wins unless all win"...what a lovely line Susan !...Sumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-16858773574955441562014-08-15T04:36:02.805-04:002014-08-15T04:36:02.805-04:00Ahh..to share instead of compete is the way to pea...Ahh..to share instead of compete is the way to peace..and actually documented in Anthropology as the 20 most peaceful societies..are all so called primitive ones..where the child is the prize..and village raises the child together..to share for survival to know we rely on each other true..and depend on the life of ALL OTHERS.. to get us through!Katie Mia Frederickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01336627766755378406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-72042285910659260132014-08-15T01:11:36.182-04:002014-08-15T01:11:36.182-04:00This is a beautiful homecoming :).This is a beautiful homecoming :).Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17392858163745232319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-33738382708849953322014-08-15T00:45:12.839-04:002014-08-15T00:45:12.839-04:00That reasoning you have in your beat Susan, falls ...That reasoning you have in your beat Susan, falls so natural in this poem - that I so well remember.. Great to revisit with my drum next to me.. brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-12927652141268472662014-08-14T23:30:39.216-04:002014-08-14T23:30:39.216-04:00nice...the inclusion of the pauses in the second s...nice...the inclusion of the pauses in the second stanza add like another layer of punctuation to each of those statements....very effective susanBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-48633312066855899962014-08-14T02:35:46.771-04:002014-08-14T02:35:46.771-04:00Very true..........and a good message.Very true..........and a good message.Aishwarya Mageshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13389941948853317331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-34186006785342568082014-08-13T08:55:48.563-04:002014-08-13T08:55:48.563-04:00Crowds witness strategy and cooper-
ation, since n...Crowds witness strategy and cooper-<br />ation, since no one wins unless all win.<br /><br />Very true in all forms of debates or human conflicts violent or otherwise. Great write Susan!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-78247148835485311232014-08-12T22:08:42.860-04:002014-08-12T22:08:42.860-04:00to quote the old star-trek line: Make is so :)to quote the old star-trek line: Make is so :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-19669386817846529112014-08-12T20:06:32.683-04:002014-08-12T20:06:32.683-04:00Our last incarnations are as saplings
together hol...Our last incarnations are as saplings<br />together holding on to our planet.<br /><br />ugh, a great close to a wonderful write! Amazing, Susan :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03359959975341890512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-80466080205329825242014-08-12T18:28:47.326-04:002014-08-12T18:28:47.326-04:00Wouldn't that be great, if we all cooperate, w...Wouldn't that be great, if we all cooperate, we all win ~ Sometimes I think that the way to peace is through war as one only understands and appreciates peace after experiencing turmoil & much sadness ~ But what a dream, hey ~ Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-89603150923639619982014-08-12T17:57:28.783-04:002014-08-12T17:57:28.783-04:00loved those last two linesloved those last two linesWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-33015027116379799232014-08-12T17:06:22.971-04:002014-08-12T17:06:22.971-04:00wow!!! wow!!! wow!!!! Brilliant! and your writing ...wow!!! wow!!! wow!!!! Brilliant! and your writing fills this world with hope and joy.<br /><br /><br />I love this piece very much. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-71350128877809991702014-08-12T17:01:49.908-04:002014-08-12T17:01:49.908-04:00The only way of winning.. I love that.. such games...The only way of winning.. I love that.. such games usually end up with a few sabotaging to gain a smaller profit for them self (I have seen it happen)... alas it only takes one ... it only takes one.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-9013605137899535282014-08-12T16:59:21.432-04:002014-08-12T16:59:21.432-04:00what a wonderful place that would be eh? all that ...what a wonderful place that would be eh? all that cooperation...and problem solving...mixing of generations...love the rather magic of that last bit...coming back as trees holding the planet together....we can hope cant we?Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-456333369930820298.post-60896783759019836722014-08-12T13:27:46.935-04:002014-08-12T13:27:46.935-04:00OH! MY! GOODNESS! This is brilliant, beautiful, an...OH! MY! GOODNESS! This is brilliant, beautiful, and as hopeful as it gets. From your mouth to humans' (all of us!) ears!!!!!!!! Can you set up a game like this in the Middle East, do you think?? Visionary work, Susan. And how I love your vision.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.com