Taking the covers off
as sun lifts fog,
as silence sifts shushes
as low tide shows seashells.
Retelling the epiphany ~
that instant Light appeared
and will again return
dawn after dawn, day after night.
What was never hidden
that only ripening reveals?
What have you hidden from
yourself? from me? from all?
Lay it bare slowly, slant
it like Emily’s truth**
revelation might hurt
like poison from too much to drink.
Meet me at choir practice where
we will find notes to ripen words
to tones that root our feet to earth
and lift our heads to skies above.
Reach up, lay bare, open and show
invisible presence inside
and out, repeat repeat
and resonate, resound.
**Emily Dickinson, "Tell all the truth but tell it slant" — (1263)
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Wow.. that's the song of revelation indeed. "What was never hidden that only ripening reveals?" what an exquisite line!
ReplyDeleteRetelling the epiphany ~
ReplyDeletethat instant Light appeared
and will again return
dawn after dawn, day after night.
Such gorgeous lines Susan :D
slowly, gradually revealing the light, the soul of the word in such beautiful and amazing imagery... "Lay it bare slowly, slant / it like Emily’s truth** / revelation might hurt / like poison from too much to drink." done so poetically...not only this stanza but all of them, quoted it as my favorite...
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely lovely, raw and filled with passion. A new favorite of mine from your catalog of wonder.
ReplyDeleteI like the reference to the choir practice. The uplifting of the spirit - worshipping via musical collaboration.
ReplyDeleteI especially love "what was never hidden that only ripening reveals".....wow! A wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteWow. One can read and reread this and get a little closer to awakening each time. I feel the passion in this, the faith, the hope and trust that the light is revealed. What a beautiful image to hold during my day. Thank you Susan.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully written. This poem sounds like a song of revelation.
ReplyDeleteWhat was never hidden
ReplyDeletethat only ripening reveals?
i think that is a wonderful question that could birth many a poem susan. i like too how you opening it with the dawn of a day, which leas to it ripening as well. solid close on this one as well. that last stanza is solid, imho.
What a song you have written Susan....feeling like a soul has been opened and revealed a true self....loved these lines...
ReplyDelete'Reach up, lay bare, open and show
invisible presence inside
and out, repeat repeat
and resonate, resound. '
Makes one wonder. Appreciate you sharing.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful sounds in the opening and love the concept...especially this:
ReplyDelete"we will find notes to ripen words
to tones that root our feet to earth
and lift our heads to skies above."
Beautiful, Susan!
Thank you for the inspiring prompt!
I loved this, especially... "revelation might hurt
ReplyDeletelike poison from too much to drink."
I adore the first stanza very much, Susan. It gave me a relaxing feeling actually - and a hopeful one at that. Revelation always has its pros and cons as you have perfectly stressed out.
ReplyDeleteEven with the idea that sometimes it is all too much to take in. Lovely capture here, Susan.
ReplyDelete"as sun lifts fog,
ReplyDeleteas silence sifts shushes
as low tide shows seashells."--Exquisite!!...yes, that's when the realisation dawns.
Beautiful song...slow, mellifluous and endearing thoughts!Thank Susan...
What a stunningly beautiful song this is Susan.
ReplyDeleteLovely! This poem certainly sings. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is truly an interesting write! Is it truth, after all?
ReplyDeleteluv your hope in returning light
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Lovely poem Susan
ReplyDeleteLoved the way reveal the fact.The first stanza is lovelier.
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful poem, Susan. I loved the alliteration the literary references and the wonderful word painting. I ahd to go back a re-read it a couple of times!
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