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| Whale at Port San Luis, photo by Dawn Beattie |
From crying creatures
everywhere, streams
of tears flow into
rivers heading sea-
ward where whales respond
Oooohhh
Or is it whales
who initiate tears
joined upstream by
sentient creatures?
Transform now. We die
Oooohhh
Racing to survive
by slowly changing,
we moan toward each
other, silently
moving, echoing
Oooohhh
Hurry, we haven’t
much time to
get there.
We’ll have to go more
than halfway. We'll have
to change completely.
So very true that we do need to change our ways completely. We ARE so quickly running out of time.... There are way too many 'crying creatures' everywhere.. I hope many of those who cry will be spared.
ReplyDeletewonderful message Susan
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have a nice Monday; i agree too many of our animals are senselessly slaughtered
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Monday WRites#37
the positive end gives us much hope, we do need to change and move towards each other...let not this planet drown in tears. ....
ReplyDeleteThe callous way we treat the rivers and oceans is heartbreaking especially when it is for such short term gain in mining ventures or in Australia's precious Great Barrier reef for for easier access for tankers and ore carriers. We must keep singing our song.
ReplyDeleteSuch a beautifully touching write.. indeed in order to save these crying creatures we must first mend our ways before its too late.
ReplyDeleteLots of love,
Sanaa
So beautifully expressed Susan...more than halfway is absolutely right....
ReplyDeleteYes - we need to on many levels - global, local and internally...sometimes seeing is very far from the next step of trying to change/transform things - a powerful poem...
ReplyDeletesuch a unique concept of our waters and the slaughters therein - "Nor all thy Tears wash out a Word of it"
ReplyDeletePity...why intelligent species like us do not hear their screams. Great message, susan.Lovely piece...
ReplyDeleteThe whales song so beautiful and yet so mournful, they are such wonderful creatures..oh, the initiation of tears so sad..we must go more than halfway.
ReplyDeleteOr is it whales
who initiate tears
joined upstream by
sentient creatures?
Transform now. We die
I love the cry of the whales joining or inviting other creatures. We must join this cry too and change completely. They(we) musn't die. Very touching poem Susan. Such a sad reality.
ReplyDeleteSadly true but still, the hope at the end. Such a different take on the prompt and just lovely. Water is our life and these beautiful creatures - both we treat with such savage disregard. Wonderful write.
ReplyDeleteThe tragedy is that mankind is not readily able to determine the varied variety of sea creatures. We are not able to say which among them are extinct.In the meantime they are being killed for food or sports. Good twist to the prompt Susan!
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love the musical feel of it as the river can be musical itself! cheers to you Susan!
ReplyDeleteI like the rhythm to this and was glad for the hope at the end. Lets hope we can change.
ReplyDeleteThat's a really original take .~ I'm glad there's still hope at the end.
ReplyDeleteYes, we MUST change completely!
ReplyDeleteAll the poets agree we must change everything....we should be running this planet:)
ReplyDeleteI feel bereft.
ReplyDeleteYour poem Susan, reminded me of all the things we have failed to protect, to safeguard, to fight for.
A melancholy poem for the sad song of the dying whales. Unless we change, we shall be left alone in the wasteland. Powerful write, Susan.
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