31 July 2013

Hands

knocking 
knuckles
knobs 

turning
praying

wars
into 
welcomes




Posted for Poets United Verse First ~  The Red Wheelbarrow.

Copyright © 2013 S.L.Chast 
Submitted to Types and Shadows 9/17/2013
Chosen for my own poetry book 11/5/2013

 

20 comments:

  1. Susan, you captured the spirit of the short form and actually came up with a handful of words simply drenched in meaning. The final line is the kicker, and I wouldn't have this any other way. Eloquent and striking. Amy

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    1. Thank you, Amy. I revised this one more than any other poem in my life. Essence distilled, I hope.

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  2. Oh wow Susan those last lines

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  3. all in the hands for sure
    & how we use them.

    very minimalist susan
    but you dont lose the meaning
    that is for sure.

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  4. Now that is what this world needs:)

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  5. Well done. The last line pulls it together perfectly

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  6. ...your little piece for sure warms the heart... the hands used to war are the same hands that will adorn the guns with flowers & peace... somewhat, reminds me of a scene from our historical martial law.... i enjoyed this... smiles...

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  7. Wars into welcomes - Wow...that is really good. Love it

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  8. Nice, it ends with welcome :)

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  9. 'wars into welcomes'

    not likely, but if only...

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  10. I really like the idea of 'wars into welcomes.'

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  11. excellent! I love what I got from the last lines...deep...

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  12. wars into welcomes...sometimes true.

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  13. Fabulous! Wars into welcomes........from your mouth to God's ear!

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  14. A litany of literary excellence. Nicely done, Suasn!

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  15. it is a choice in the hands!wonderful composition

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  16. That was truly short and sharp wars into welcomes would be refreshing

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  17. Vey succinct, and full of meaning.

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